天津高考英语 · 写作真题通关课
Wr003 · 句子升级与避雷：写出让阅卷人加分的句子
从五种基本句型到复合句与加分句型，同时绕开十大高频错误
Wr003 · 升级路径
01句子升级三级跳：简单句 → 并列句 → 复合句
第五档要求「句式词汇丰富」。先把五种基本句型写对，再往上叠加并列与复合。下面五个例句都取自天津真题情境：
| 句型 | 结构 | 真题情境例句 |
|---|---|---|
| SV | 主 + 谓 | The exchange student arrived yesterday.（交换生昨天到了） |
| SVP | 主 + 系 + 表 | The coming-of-age ceremony was really meaningful.（成人礼很有意义） |
| SVO | 主 + 谓 + 宾 | We welcomed the exchange student warmly.（我们热情欢迎交换生） |
| SVOO | 主 + 谓 + 间宾 + 直宾 | I gave Chris a warm welcome.（我给了 Chris 热情的欢迎） |
| SVOC | 主 + 谓 + 宾 + 宾补 | We found the activity inspiring.（我们觉得活动很鼓舞人） |
同一个意思，三级写法对比
① 简单句：Chris will come to our school. I am very happy.
② 并列句：Chris will come to our school, and I am very happy about it.
③ 复合句：I am more than happy to learn that Chris, an exchange student, will come to study in our school next term.
升级点：并列句用 and 连接；复合句用 that 宾语从句 + 同位语 an exchange student，一句顶两句。
Wr003 · 加分句型
02天津阅卷爱给分的四类句型
在准确的前提下，每篇范文里有意识地嵌入 2–3 个下面句型，是冲第五档最稳的手段。
一、定语从句（修饰名词，放在主体段）
The book you recommended is well worth reading.
你推荐的那本书很值得读。（读书情境；省略 that）
你推荐的那本书很值得读。（读书情境；省略 that）
We will visit the Haihe River, which lies in the center of our city.
我们将游览海河，它穿城而过。（一日安排；非限制性定语从句）
我们将游览海河，它穿城而过。（一日安排；非限制性定语从句）
二、非谓语动词（doing / done / to do，作状语或定语）
Excited about the news, I can’t wait to tell you about it.
听到这消息我很激动，迫不及待想告诉你。（done 作原因状语）
听到这消息我很激动，迫不及待想告诉你。（done 作原因状语）
To make our campus greener, we should turn off the lights when leaving.
为让校园更绿，离开时要关灯。（to do 作目的状语）
为让校园更绿，离开时要关灯。（to do 作目的状语）
三、with 复合结构（描写场景，作文亮点）
With so many visitors coming, we are busy preparing for the ceremony.
这么多来宾要来，我们正忙着准备仪式。（with + 宾语 + doing）
这么多来宾要来，我们正忙着准备仪式。（with + 宾语 + doing）
With books piled on the desk, the classroom looks warm and full.
书堆在桌上，教室显得温暖而充实。（with + 宾语 + done）
书堆在桌上，教室显得温暖而充实。（with + 宾语 + done）
四、倒装句 / 强调句（用于结尾升华，最多用一次）
Only in this way can we make our campus a better place.
只有这样我们才能把校园建设得更好。（only + 状语置于句首倒装）
只有这样我们才能把校园建设得更好。（only + 状语置于句首倒装）
It was the volunteers who made the Games such a success.
正是志愿者让全运会如此成功。（It was…who… 强调句）
正是志愿者让全运会如此成功。（It was…who… 强调句）
提醒：加分句型贵在「准」不在「多」。一句话里塞进两个倒装或强调，反而显得堆砌、易错。
Wr003 · 十大避雷
03十大高频语法错误：写前对照检查
| 错误句 | 正确句 | 说明 |
|---|---|---|
| I am very happy when I heard the news. | I was very happy when I heard the news. | 时态一致：heard 是过去，主句也用过去时。 |
| Everyone in our class welcome him. | Everyone in our class welcomes him. | 主谓一致：everyone 作主语谓语用单数。 |
| He is exchange student from America. | He is an exchange student from America. | 冠词：exchange 元音音素开头，用 an。 |
| We will give him many advices. | We will give him much advice / many suggestions. | 名词可数性：advice 不可数，无复数。 |
| We are busy prepare for the ceremony. | We are busy preparing for the ceremony. | 介词搭配：be busy doing sth.。 |
| Although he is tired, but he keeps working. | Although he is tired, he keeps working. | 中式连接：although 与 but 不能连用。 |
| I don’t know what is he doing. | I don’t know what he is doing. | 从句语序：宾语从句用陈述语序。 |
| Walking along the street, the building looks beautiful. | Walking along the street, I found the building beautiful. | 非谓语逻辑主语须与主句主语一致。 |
| He is more taller than I expected. | He is much taller than I expected. | 比较级：more 不修饰比较级，用 much / even。 |
| i think he is a living Lei feng. | I think he is a living Lei Feng. | 大小写与拼写：句首大写，专有名词大写。 |
Wr003 · 连接词库
04连接词库：让全文连贯不松散
| 功能 | 连接词 / 句型 | 中文 |
|---|---|---|
| 开头目的 | I am writing to tell you about… / How is it going? | 我写信是想告诉你…… / 近来可好？ |
| 递进 | besides, what’s more, furthermore, in addition, also | 此外；而且；再者 |
| 转折 | however, but, on the other hand, instead, though | 然而；另一方面；相反 |
| 因果 | because, as, since, so, therefore, as a result | 因为；由于；因此；结果 |
| 举例 | for example, for instance, such as, take…for example | 例如；比如；以……为例 |
| 总结 | in short, in a word, all in all, generally speaking | 简言之；总之；总的来说 |
| 结尾客套 | I’m looking forward to… / I would appreciate it if… / Best wishes | 期待……；如蒙……将不胜感激；祝好 |
Wr003 · 改写演示
05真题句改写：普通句怎么升级
下面 8 组句子情境均来自天津真题，灰字为普通写法，蓝字为升级写法，底部标注用了哪种手段。
普通：Chris will come to our class. I welcome him.
升级：I’m more than delighted to welcome Chris, who will come to our class as an exchange student.
手段：非限制性定语从句 + more than delighted（2014 交换生）
普通：The winter here is cold. You should take warm clothes.
升级：As the winter here is rather cold, you’d better pack some warm clothes before you come.
手段：as 引导原因状语从句（2014 交换生）
普通：A living Lei Feng is a person. He is always ready to help others.
升级：A living Lei Feng refers to someone who, like Lei Feng, is always ready to help others.
手段：定语从句合并两句（2023.3 活雷锋）
普通：My deskmate often helps me. He is a living Lei Feng around us.
升级：Take my deskmate for example, who often helps me with my lessons after class.
手段：take…for example + 非限制性定语从句（2023.3 活雷锋）
普通：Reading opens our eyes. It also enriches our mind.
升级：Not only does reading open up our eyes, but it also enriches our mind.
手段：Not only 置于句首的部分倒装（2019.3 读书征文）
普通：Lights are left on. Water keeps running. We waste a lot.
升级：With lights left on and water running, our campus wastes a lot of energy.
手段：with 复合结构描写现象（2024.6 低碳校园）
普通：We will talk about school life. Then we will eat dumplings. Finally we will visit the Haihe River.
升级：In the morning we will have a talk about school life, after which we will enjoy dumplings and take a walk along the Haihe River.
手段：after which 定语从句串起时间顺序（2011 一日安排）
普通：I am a volunteer for the Games. I know Tianjin well.
升级：Having worked as a volunteer for the Games, I have gained a good knowledge of Tianjin.
手段：现在分词完成式作原因状语（2017.6 全运会志愿者）
Wr003 · 本课收口
06本课避坑与收口
- 为升级而升级：没把握的高级词、倒装不要硬塞，写错一个复合句比写对三个简单句更掉分。
- 只堆句型不顾衔接：句子再漂亮，没有连接词也是一盘散沙；段间、句间要有过渡。
- 十大错误不复盘：时态、主谓一致、although…but 这类错误一犯就是三四分，写完必须逐条查。
- 中式英语直译：不要把「因为……所以……」直译成 because…so…，按英语习惯只留一个连接词。
一句话收口：先写对，再写好；准确是第五档的地基，丰富是地基上的装修。
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